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Hey, im 16 and im working on this type of book thing, its a sort of diary perspective of a 16 year old girl, sort of relating to my life but with vast differences. I was hoping people may perhaps take a look, and tell me what they think, it would be nice to know if my writing is a lost cause now so that i don’t feel inclined to continue. its meant to be quite a casual thing, aimed more at teenagers of my age. thanks for taking the time, this is just an extract from a small part.xx02.43pm – English.Oh Sir, why must you moan on and on and on so? I seriously wouldn’t mind but its not as if we actually need to be here anymore, we have taken the exams, but our delightfull Headmistress cares to keep us here against our will, may I add, to suffer until the weeks end. Hrumph. I live in a small small nearly in-existent village south of Winchester city, in Hampshire a county in the fabulous country that is England. Its possibly what I would personally call on of the most exciting places currently existing on planet earth.Did you see what I did there? That was me lying! Man I’m good.I share residence begrudgingly with my Mother, Toney, and Kelly, my small but hugely annoying younger sister. Toney is my step father to be, totally insane. He’s one of those men who whip’s out the Hawaiian shirt as soon as the sun pops its head out from behind the forever looming clouds, Buys super market own brands, and is just generally a bit nutty. This aside, he’s one of the good guys, treats ma mere well, what more can you ask for really? My life revolves around my friends. Other than Jess I share a best friend relationship with Emma, Losa, Alice, and Sophie. A few of the best people ever. Emma, is tiny, like super tiny, and super skinny, its quite concerning actually. We make her eat, in fact I would go as far to say we force feed her, but it fails to work. She’s ghostly white but very pretty in a delicate type of way. Keeps to herself a lot though, just a little quiet. Losa is Chinese. She’s Amazing, she’s small and hyper and has the most accurately cut bob I have ever had the honour to view. Its like she is always running on caffeine, not only that but she has a wicked accent!!!Hmm, Ah, Alice, her hair is the most amazing shade of red, auburn. I must admit I am terribly jealous. She is “going out” with Alex, one of the strangest young men I have ever met, He’s a total nut, but totally rocks the musical world, he does all that weird electronic stuff, some of its not half bad. He’s proper tall and gangly but you can’t help but love the kid. And then there is Sophie, where to begin. She is quite possibly the most brilliantly insane person that braces this planet. She’s totally bonkers and it’s almost impossible to be sad around her. All of her is just fun, she’s got the biggest grin, it’s infectious. She’s a scruff though, her mousy hair is always all over the place. Bless her. We were sat in English doing that humming thing, you know where you take on the personality of a bee when your educators back is turned then stop automatically when they turn around, and then start again, and so on, when I got wacked in the back of the chair, geez.I turned around with that frown on my face, to be graced by Mr Andrews. Gabe.“Alllright Zo” he grinned at me. This kid and I have been mates for a while now, he’s that guy, you know the one you can have a laugh with no complications. He’s a friend. Although he is a good looking chap, very boyish, with the shaggy brown hair and the square jaw, I believe the word is also “pretty hench.”“Ahh, we meet again, you realise for that kick, I may just have to kill you.” I teased.“Well well young lady, I believe you have met your match, as there will be no murder here today, simply and embarrassing downfall for yourself, and a magnificent up rise for the Kingdom of Gabriel.” He delivered with a cheeky smile, and a queeny wave, you know that one she does when she drives past in her fancy car.I just stared at the kid concerningly , and grinned, “Hahahaa… yeh alright kid, you creep… What are you doing over here anyways, you are meant to be far away from me over there, far over there…” I hinted then stuck my tongue out. “Well as it is pet, I would much rather stare at your marvellous head, and preceded to work on my kicking skills than have to watch Jason take another shot at Hannah over there, it’d doing me nut in, I wish the kid would just take the hint. Its shameful, it truly is.” “Ahh, yes of course, as we are all aware, Hannah’s got quite the crush on our very own Mr. Andrews, has she not Gabe? What am I kidding of course you know, you’d never pass this ego boost by.” “Oh he knows alright, won’t stop going on about how the ladies can’t resist his charms.” Dan cut in. Dan was Gabe’s how shall I say, “Right hand man” they we sort of the renown joker duo within Year 11. “What can I say, its not my fault they cant resist me.” He replied in that cocky
Im 16, and ive been working on this sort of book thing, please read this extract and tell me what you think.?